Wednesday, May 27, 2020

I just wrote my first cold email. Anyone willing to provide feedback?

Hi guys,

I am starting a business directory for tattoo shops in the Netherlands. I've acquired the email of every tattoo shop and want to start sending them an email soon. I have written the following text and I would love to hear your suggestions for improvements.

Subject:

“Congrats! We’ve added {Insert Tattoo Shop Name} to our database!”

“TattooFinders account registration”

Body:

“Hi {Insert First Name},

Congrats! {Insert Tattoo Shop Name} has been added to the TattooFinders.nl database!

There’s just one last step for {Insert Tattoo Shop Name}’s business directory page to be

activated...

TattooFinders is a new platform that connects tattoo shops and artists to people looking to

get a new tattoo. Tattoo seekers are able to filter their search by shop, artist, or preferred

style. Our mission is to make the process of finding great tattoo shops and artists a lot

easier.

{Insert Tattoo Shop Name} was handpicked for our first phase of launch. You do awesome

work, and we know that people are definitely going to be searching for shops like yours on

TattooFinders.nl . Your shop has already been added to our database, all that’s left is for you

to claim your account so that you can take ownership of managing your shop's directory

page.

Claim your account by CLICKING HERE.

Let us know if you have any questions!

Cheers!

-{Insert Your Name}

TattooFinders.nl

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